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Thornton</B> + <A HREF="mailto:mageia-marketing%40mageia.org?Subject=Re%3A%20%5BMageia-marketing%5D%20Installer%20texts&In-Reply-To=%3C4F5DF3F3.6040504%40NorthTech.US%3E" + TITLE="[Mageia-marketing] Installer texts">Bradley at NorthTech.US + </A><BR> + <I>Mon Mar 12 14:02:43 CET 2012</I> + <P><UL> + <LI>Previous message: <A HREF="000577.html">[Mageia-marketing] Installer texts +</A></li> + <LI>Next message: <A HREF="000593.html">[Mageia-marketing] Installer texts +</A></li> + <LI> <B>Messages sorted by:</B> + <a href="date.html#583">[ date ]</a> + <a href="thread.html#583">[ thread ]</a> + <a href="subject.html#583">[ subject ]</a> + <a href="author.html#583">[ author ]</a> + </LI> + </UL> + <HR> +<!--beginarticle--> +<PRE>-----BEGIN PGP SIGNED MESSAGE----- +Hash: RIPEMD160 + + + +On 03/12/2012 03:37 AM, Patricia Fraser wrote: +><i> Hi folks, +</I>><i> +</I>><i> I've taken Esteban's texts (thanks Esteban!), edited and added a bit; +</I>><i> if everyone's happy with these, just pick what we need and go for it: +</I>><i> +</I>><i> ---- +</I>><i> Mageia isn't just a Linux distribution: it's a community of users, +</I>><i> developers and advocates from all around the world. Join us! +</I>><i> +</I>><i> Free software means freedom to choose. Gear up your desktop with the +</I>><i> elegant KDE, the revolutionary Gnome or the lightweight LXDE. +</I> +I just have a problem with the word *elegant* there before KDE. To me it +has a 'contrived' feeling, like putting a square peg in a round hole. +Perhaps some other adjective? + +I also offered up a variant of this copy in my earlier post too. Give a +gander there and see if there's anything you might want to merge in or +juxtapose within. + +I think we were both taken aback a little at the "If drawing is part of +your everyday job..." copy ;) + +><i> +</I>><i> Mageia's Control Center gives you easy, accessible control over your +</I>><i> computer - hardware, software and all kinds of setup, all in one place. +</I> +*all kinds of setup* - Either this doesn't seem grammatically correct or +it's just too colloquial. + +'and all manner of preferred configuration[s], all in one [easy to +operate] place' ??? + + +*Control* is used twice in the same sentance, maybe "...configuration of +your computer..." ??? + + + +><i> +</I>><i> For great 2D or 3D graphics, Mageia's standard packages help you create +</I>><i> raster or vector graphics or 3D animations - and then there's video +</I>><i> editing... +</I> +Daddy like ;) If anything, maybe consider s/great/outstanding ??? + +I like BIG adjectives LOL! + +><i> +</I>><i> Write great documents, analyse your data and create great business +</I>><i> presentations with the office suite LibreOffice. +</I> +*Great* is used twice in the same sentence. Check out the similar blurb +I offered up in the previous post for possible variations of this verbiage. + +><i> +</I>><i> Browse the web, check your email, chat with your friends; Mageia +</I>><i> includes all the applications you need. +</I> +hm... maybe something like, "...includes all of your favorite social +applications, right at your fingertips!", or "...includes all the social +applications..." or "...includes all the communications applications..." + +And I dunno, but *need*.... hm... desire, want, are used to, demand, or +maybe... + +"...includes all of the [social|communications] applications you're +already familiar with". + +*need* doesn't quite have the oomph I want to feel there. + +><i> +</I>><i> Code, compile, debug and package - Mageia puts all the development +</I>><i> applications and tools at your fingertips. +</I> +Fantastic :) or mabye something like "...puts an entire universe of +development...", or, "...a complete universe of...", etc. + +Anyway, I hope that helps! + +Kindest regards, + + +- -- +Bradley D. 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